Ruby Red Wine Poetic thoughts: if you were a crayon...what color would be?
If I Were a Crayon
by Victoria Tarrani
((c) 0903.26
if I were a crayon
I would be red
scarlett bright
deep ruby or
fine wine
inflamed at
twilight time
laughing
moving swiftly
over the pages
adding depth
mysteries
intrigue
how could I
be anything
but red
demanding attention
a small
black ball
dances
across my spaces
eager gamblers
yell
come on red
secrets
flitting through roses
shading or tinting myself
for maroon and pink
touching
stargazer lilies
tinged with a streak
of deep blood red
that brings
the fragrance
of life
yes,
if I were a crayon
I would be
red
I am Victoria Tarrani, by the way.
Please critique. This is a very rough draft and it needs work.
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Tori
There are some superb poems here. I hope you post them where I can comment for you.
Extra Deck: 15
3 Stardust Dragon
2 Red Dragon Archfiend
2 Thought Ruler Archfiend
1 Goyo Guardian
2 Iron Chain Dragon
2 Colossal Fighter
2 Magical Android
1 Black Rose Dragon
i have made a fire deck which i call (hellfrie of Ifrit) i send you the list through email sometime this week if i post this deck up here it wont be original anymore this is my most powerful fire deck
Yu-Gi-Oh! Deck Profile - Black Fire Bomb (Red-Eyes Black Disaster Dragon)
What has lots of fire on top and plenty of water bellow?
I have watched Negima!? about 3-4 times now and it frustrates the hell out of me when the Black Rose Barron introduces this riddle....and then no one comes up with the answer the entire series.
I have thought about this on and off for about 6 months now and the only answer i can come up with is an oil fire in the ocean. However i think this is to sensible for a riddle. Good luck to anyone who tries to answer!
Your taking it too literally, fire doesn't mean fire as in the element, it means aggression in the mind and water doesn't mean water you drink, but a body, the human body is 90% water. So the answer to the riddle is a frustrated person, probably the same frustrated person that couldn't figure out the riddle.
At work just another ordinary day
But then she turned it into an extraordinary day
Physically perfect
Personally better
Long black hair
Deep blue eyes
I don’t tell no lies
Just perfection
As she spoke
I nearly had a stroke
Cupid hit me
She asked if I was busy
Honestly no,
Are you having a good day? was my reply
Its not too bad
Her soft voice sang back to me
Sound of beauty
My head went dizzy
There’s tea and coffee in the waiting room
She came out with a cup for me
Forgot the sugar
Still tasted sweet
With the first sup
All my doom and gloom was gone
Her phone buzzed
She said hi with a smile
My heart raced at one hundred miles
Her teeth were like pearls
Her smile revealed
I put the wheels back on the car
Knowing she would drive away on them
The day went dim
So I closed my eyes and imagined what could have been
Thanks for opinions or advice or just reading...PEACE
i really like it. especially the style & structure. i would use a thesaurus for some of your more simpler words to make it sound more intelligent, or to create a more delicate image .